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It was an attack from Trish hands. She threw a twin chakram blades that suddenly appeared when she summoned them. Her special weapon. The twin chakram was too big for the girl, but she could use it easily as if her hands were made to control them. Its sharp black blades successfully separated the rattlesnake’s new head in a second before the snake even realized that it was in danger. Whooosh! The chakram spun back to the girl and she could just catch them without getting any cut. “Thank you, Trish. That’s amazing.” Neo could not hide his amazement toward Trish’s movement. He quickly jumped forward to grab Tony’s shoulders and pulled him back before the rattlesnake monster grow back its head. “You did well. We will never know that the snake could regenerate like that if you didn’t do anything. Pull yourself together, okay?” Neo shook Tony’s shoulders to get his attention back. And he made it. Tony nodded and gulped his saliva. He looks confused but at least, his confidence was bac
A 17-year-old boy lay on the silver metal bed inside a freezing room. The temperature of the room was set at minus twenty degree Celsius. He was not alone. Four to five people wearing clothes like astronauts were standing surrounding him. Some held a notebook and started to note everything, but the other two, two same-age women in their early fifties, were busy investigating the teenage boy."How's subject 888's progress?" asked the first woman with blonde hair to the other with black hair."He is fine. All fine. Probably will wake up soon. I hope." The black-haired woman answered. She grabbed the boy's right hand and held it tight as if it could wake him up.The others just stared at her and kept silent."Come on, Asher. It was just a bacterium. You're stronger than it. Much stronger," she whispered.Everyone in that room knew the relationship between that unconscious boy and the lady, a son, and the mother. The biological relationship in their limited world.The room is a special ro
The party they were talking about was illegal. The party was held by The HumanBot without the permission of The Creators. But yeah, The HumanBot was just a normal teenager, by the way. They loved to party as if it had already been planted in their DNA.But as Tony’s said … Asher was known as the luckiest one. The luckiest HumanBot. And what it meant by the luckiest is that all the modified DNA planted into his body was expressed very well. Not like the others.Being created from technology and science, the more modified DNA expression, the more perfection they got. Although Asher became The Creator’s favorite when he was born, still … he himself hated his destiny to the bones.Being the luckiest makes almost all of The HumanBot jealous. None of his race likes him except Tony, of course. That’s why he never got invited to any party.Also, having many modified DNA expressions in his body made him suffer. Those expressions made a complication that almost always reappeared every three mon
As the humans started the new life under the ground, they tried hard to increase their population. They needed to reproduce, and they made it. But, the babies could not live longer than seven years because of the conditions under the ground. Their tiny lungs could not compete with the adult to get the low oxygen supplies.Humans tried to solve that problem by bringing the baby to the ground's surface. But, of course, the radiation killed them within a second. It was really frustrating at that moment. Although they can produce, the babies cannot live. And thus, the population decreased by time.And one day, a group of scientists who labeled themselves as The Creators discovered something that might bring back the glory for the human race. It was the HumanBot breed. They were not just ordinary human babies.“Hope? Why?” Aaron looks displeased.Hope, the girl, jumped into the conversation. She didn’t smile a bit. The expression on her face would always be the seriousness.“I have importa
Neo was laid on the metal bed once again. But this time, he could hear voices surrounding him. Not only one but many. He forced his eyes to open, but it seemed like those eyes of his were not under his control anymore. Realizing that, Neo focused on increasing his hearing system and tried to hear what the conversation was about.“What did you do to him? You promised me he would no longer suffer. But, what was this?”A woman's voice. It was very soft and gentle. Neo could feel the emotion from her, a thick emotion. She was crying while speaking.“You can have my word. He’s fine. It was just the side effect of a special weapon implant. His immune system is too strong, it rejected the weapon.” Neo breathed slowly. He remembered the second voice. It belonged to Corine, the only woman he could remember.“I would never sign that agreement if anything bad happened to him.” Said the crying woman. Her presence close to Neo brought a warm feeling that Neo couldn’t understand. It comforted him.
Neo was startled by those notifications again. Suddenly he remembered the thing that he had read before he collapsed. Something called the mutant system. One thing that, so far, still hasn’t been explained by Corine.“What’s happening? What are you waiting for? We have to hurry.” Corine looked back to Neo after she couldn’t hear any footsteps behind her.Neo stared at her, thinking. Then, he decided to ask. After all, he somehow believed that Corine knew everything.“Where can I get DNA essence?” he asked carefully.But Corine didn’t give him an answer right forward. She remained silent and looked like she was battling with her own mind.“What are you talking about? DNA essence? Did I make another mistake during the upgrade, causing you to start talking non-sense?”The answer he got made him even more confused. But, before Neo lost his memory, in his past … he was already known as one of the brilliant HumanBot.Neo was sure that the notification he got before passing out was different
“INFINITY!” shouted Neo.Of a sudden, all those empty eyes glitched. Shining-red lights blink from their robot eyes as if the code just reactivated their system. Everyone started to grasp their breath. Many of them looked terrified, but the remaining looked calmed down.Neo just watched what was happening in front of him and stayed silent. He felt relief when he saw Tony back to normal, breathing easily while his eyes found him, then smiled.However, although everyone there had received their consciousness back, they didn’t move from their line as if they were still under the control of the program or something. Neo looked at Corine. His expression clearly hid many questions.“What was that for? The code?” Neo realized that the code Corine’s gave was somehow activating the HumanBot as if they were under his control. Knowing that fact, Neo once again felt that Corine was just using him and the HumanBot.“An army should work properly. Somebody should give them an order. And that somebod
Corine left all the HumanBot inside the hall without any more words coming from her lips. She walked out like a ghost while Neo was still trying to push his body to move like he wanted. But he couldn’t.Neo found out that his body was controlled by someone else who was not himself. The same fate that all the HumanBot also faced. It was strange, but remembering the latest upgrade that he still didn’t know the detail, made him feel robbed. Not only him but all the HumanBot. They lose their freedom before they even realize it.“Neo, how you doing?” Tony ran to Neo. After the metal door hidden on the wall closed entirely, all the HumanBot were suddenly free to move on their own.Neo stared at Tony from head to toe as if he was investigating him and trying to find what’ things had changed. But as long as he could remember, Neo couldn’t see any changes in Tony’s physical.“Do you get it too?” asked Neo, a strange feeling made his throat itchy. It feels like it’s been a while since the last