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It was an attack from Trish hands. She threw a twin chakram blades that suddenly appeared when she summoned them. Her special weapon. The twin chakram was too big for the girl, but she could use it easily as if her hands were made to control them. Its sharp black blades successfully separated the rattlesnake’s new head in a second before the snake even realized that it was in danger. Whooosh! The chakram spun back to the girl and she could just catch them without getting any cut. “Thank you, Trish. That’s amazing.” Neo could not hide his amazement toward Trish’s movement. He quickly jumped forward to grab Tony’s shoulders and pulled him back before the rattlesnake monster grow back its head. “You did well. We will never know that the snake could regenerate like that if you didn’t do anything. Pull yourself together, okay?” Neo shook Tony’s shoulders to get his attention back. And he made it. Tony nodded and gulped his saliva. He looks confused but at least, his confidence was bac
A 17-year-old boy lay on the silver metal bed inside a freezing room. The temperature of the room was set at minus twenty degree Celsius. He was not alone. Four to five people wearing clothes like astronauts were standing surrounding him. Some held a notebook and started to note everything, but the other two, two same-age women in their early fifties, were busy investigating the teenage boy."How's subject 888's progress?" asked the first woman with blonde hair to the other with black hair."He is fine. All fine. Probably will wake up soon. I hope." The black-haired woman answered. She grabbed the boy's right hand and held it tight as if it could wake him up.The others just stared at her and kept silent."Come on, Asher. It was just a bacterium. You're stronger than it. Much stronger," she whispered.Everyone in that room knew the relationship between that unconscious boy and the lady, a son, and the mother. The biological relationship in their limited world.The room is a special ro
The party they were talking about was illegal. The party was held by The HumanBot without the permission of The Creators. But yeah, The HumanBot was just a normal teenager, by the way. They loved to party as if it had already been planted in their DNA.But as Tony’s said … Asher was known as the luckiest one. The luckiest HumanBot. And what it meant by the luckiest is that all the modified DNA planted into his body was expressed very well. Not like the others.Being created from technology and science, the more modified DNA expression, the more perfection they got. Although Asher became The Creator’s favorite when he was born, still … he himself hated his destiny to the bones.Being the luckiest makes almost all of The HumanBot jealous. None of his race likes him except Tony, of course. That’s why he never got invited to any party.Also, having many modified DNA expressions in his body made him suffer. Those expressions made a complication that almost always reappeared every three mon
As the humans started the new life under the ground, they tried hard to increase their population. They needed to reproduce, and they made it. But, the babies could not live longer than seven years because of the conditions under the ground. Their tiny lungs could not compete with the adult to get the low oxygen supplies.Humans tried to solve that problem by bringing the baby to the ground's surface. But, of course, the radiation killed them within a second. It was really frustrating at that moment. Although they can produce, the babies cannot live. And thus, the population decreased by time.And one day, a group of scientists who labeled themselves as The Creators discovered something that might bring back the glory for the human race. It was the HumanBot breed. They were not just ordinary human babies.“Hope? Why?” Aaron looks displeased.Hope, the girl, jumped into the conversation. She didn’t smile a bit. The expression on her face would always be the seriousness.“I have importa
Neo was laid on the metal bed once again. But this time, he could hear voices surrounding him. Not only one but many. He forced his eyes to open, but it seemed like those eyes of his were not under his control anymore. Realizing that, Neo focused on increasing his hearing system and tried to hear what the conversation was about.“What did you do to him? You promised me he would no longer suffer. But, what was this?”A woman's voice. It was very soft and gentle. Neo could feel the emotion from her, a thick emotion. She was crying while speaking.“You can have my word. He’s fine. It was just the side effect of a special weapon implant. His immune system is too strong, it rejected the weapon.” Neo breathed slowly. He remembered the second voice. It belonged to Corine, the only woman he could remember.“I would never sign that agreement if anything bad happened to him.” Said the crying woman. Her presence close to Neo brought a warm feeling that Neo couldn’t understand. It comforted him.
Neo was startled by those notifications again. Suddenly he remembered the thing that he had read before he collapsed. Something called the mutant system. One thing that, so far, still hasn’t been explained by Corine.“What’s happening? What are you waiting for? We have to hurry.” Corine looked back to Neo after she couldn’t hear any footsteps behind her.Neo stared at her, thinking. Then, he decided to ask. After all, he somehow believed that Corine knew everything.“Where can I get DNA essence?” he asked carefully.But Corine didn’t give him an answer right forward. She remained silent and looked like she was battling with her own mind.“What are you talking about? DNA essence? Did I make another mistake during the upgrade, causing you to start talking non-sense?”The answer he got made him even more confused. But, before Neo lost his memory, in his past … he was already known as one of the brilliant HumanBot.Neo was sure that the notification he got before passing out was different
“INFINITY!” shouted Neo.Of a sudden, all those empty eyes glitched. Shining-red lights blink from their robot eyes as if the code just reactivated their system. Everyone started to grasp their breath. Many of them looked terrified, but the remaining looked calmed down.Neo just watched what was happening in front of him and stayed silent. He felt relief when he saw Tony back to normal, breathing easily while his eyes found him, then smiled.However, although everyone there had received their consciousness back, they didn’t move from their line as if they were still under the control of the program or something. Neo looked at Corine. His expression clearly hid many questions.“What was that for? The code?” Neo realized that the code Corine’s gave was somehow activating the HumanBot as if they were under his control. Knowing that fact, Neo once again felt that Corine was just using him and the HumanBot.“An army should work properly. Somebody should give them an order. And that somebod
Corine left all the HumanBot inside the hall without any more words coming from her lips. She walked out like a ghost while Neo was still trying to push his body to move like he wanted. But he couldn’t.Neo found out that his body was controlled by someone else who was not himself. The same fate that all the HumanBot also faced. It was strange, but remembering the latest upgrade that he still didn’t know the detail, made him feel robbed. Not only him but all the HumanBot. They lose their freedom before they even realize it.“Neo, how you doing?” Tony ran to Neo. After the metal door hidden on the wall closed entirely, all the HumanBot were suddenly free to move on their own.Neo stared at Tony from head to toe as if he was investigating him and trying to find what’ things had changed. But as long as he could remember, Neo couldn’t see any changes in Tony’s physical.“Do you get it too?” asked Neo, a strange feeling made his throat itchy. It feels like it’s been a while since the last
It was an attack from Trish hands. She threw a twin chakram blades that suddenly appeared when she summoned them. Her special weapon. The twin chakram was too big for the girl, but she could use it easily as if her hands were made to control them. Its sharp black blades successfully separated the rattlesnake’s new head in a second before the snake even realized that it was in danger. Whooosh! The chakram spun back to the girl and she could just catch them without getting any cut. “Thank you, Trish. That’s amazing.” Neo could not hide his amazement toward Trish’s movement. He quickly jumped forward to grab Tony’s shoulders and pulled him back before the rattlesnake monster grow back its head. “You did well. We will never know that the snake could regenerate like that if you didn’t do anything. Pull yourself together, okay?” Neo shook Tony’s shoulders to get his attention back. And he made it. Tony nodded and gulped his saliva. He looks confused but at least, his confidence was bac
The rattlesnake monster was less aggressive compared to the Tarantula. Its huge and long body moved out from the box. The green smoke was still circulating around the snake, covering the tip of its tail as if the smoke was continuously secreted through that body part. Neo and the other survivors of HumanBot moved backward to give a space for the snake in front of them. They do know that the upcoming battle required huge space because after all … anything could happened to them. Anything bad like poisonous spit from the snake or something else. They need to stay aware. “What do you want me to do?” asked Trish, her eyes widened after realizing that her strength would help Neo. She could not even stop staring to Neo’s eyes with a spark on her eyes as if she was staring at the person that she most adore. “Fight with me, by my side. Wait for my-” Neo did not continue his words because suddenly the notification distracted him once more time. [Automatic-weapon controller is ready] [Wait
An explanation about the automatic system planted to Neo’s body suddenly made all the HumanBot inside the hall silenced. In their mind, it would be very cool to have such a power that can defeat the Greenish as big as the Tarantula Greenish alone like Neo did. However, after hearing to Hope’s point of view, almost half of them changed their mind. Knowing that they will become a fully robot fighter scared them. After all, freedom was the greatest thing that they can dream of. “All right, what’s next? It is over, right?” Aaron broke the silence with his mocking voice. He glanced to Neo who stood in front of him, battling against his own mind. Neo thought that Hope was right. Hundred percent right and it made him felt like a joke. Because he was the one who already have that system and he did not even realized that he lost control over his own body. But before Neo could think about it any further, suddenly the sound of the annoying alarm was back … ZINK! ZINK! The lights inside the
Neo had finally understood what was going on. Even so, he could not tell the true story to anyone inside that hall because he still had a lack of trust toward the others, including his best friend. Using his creative mind, Neo tried to find an excuse to tell them before their curiosity led to something bad happening.“It was Corine’s special gift.” Neo answered to question of Aaron.Everyone who still could stand on their feet was now looking at Neo. They were having a big curiosity toward him now. After all, they never saw Neo do such a thing during the training against something. Besides, this time was the first time for all HumanBot to fight against the real monster, the Greenish. Usually, they only have to fight the low-quality robot with integrated AI in their system.“Special gift?” Aaron could not believe it. But however, his voice sounded like he was jealous, as usual.“Yes, it’s a special gift for me. That’s why she asked me to be the leader. Because of that gift.” Neo starte
“Neo!”“Neo!”“Neo, wake up!”Neo could hear a soft voice that he knew belonged to Hope. She called his name hundreds of times, and now … her call could be heard by Neo.The teenage boy started to move his eyelids, trying to open them. A bit hard to do, as if both of his eyelids were sealed by something.“What happened?” Neo groaned as his body felt ached. He was confused by the looks of four different faces. They looked worried.Hope, Tony, the one girl with short hair like a guy that must be Trish, and another guy with a pale face. Neo did not know what they were thinking; thus, he pulled his back to sit, and once again … he found himself on the floor.“Gosh, you scared me!” Hope moved backward, creating a distance. Her body was covered by sweat. Same as the others three.Neo did not ask for more questions. In fact, he looked around and discovered that the view was totally different from the previous one he could remember.In front of him, five meters away, there was Tarantula’s car
Neo could feel his body refreshed as if he had just woken up from eight hours of sleep after having such a nutritious dinner before bedtime. The feeling he got came from absorbing the DNA essences from the Tarantula’s leg into his system bank.It was only a low amount of DE, but the effect made Neo feel spoiled. Even so, he did not have such a long time to enjoy the treatment from the system because the Tarantula right in front of him was starting to find a way to stand up with one leg gone.“Come on, Greenish. Give me more.”Neo started to understand now. He learned very well.The system inside his body that never stop asking to be fed with something containing DNA could be everything. Especially the living things. All Neo had learned from the academic school he got as the HumanBot, every living thing have DNA.But however, the system was like only recognizing the Greenish DNA at this moment. Ignoring DNA from the human or even the HumanBot. Because the notification showed that there
The Greenish race was not originated from Planet Earth. They have their own planet before invading the Earth and destroying everything, converting it to another place suitable for their new home.Humans did not know the reason why The Greenish came out of nowhere and never left because no human could interact with the Greenish. They could speak, of course, but their language and human language were not the same.One important thing about The Greenish that everyone already knew was the fact that they were all shapeshifters. The original appearance of The Greenish was just something covered in green color. They were fully alive.They do not have skin like a human; their skin is as dry as reptiles. But they do not have scales on their body, nor fur. Only Skin. Their body was slim without any curve, just as linear as a ruler. They have three eyeballs colored black attached to the front of their face. They did not have any nostrils, but their mouth was just a big round-shaped cavity with h
Neo could no longer speak as if a lock system was placed on his lips. He was trying to free himself, but still, he had no power to move at that moment. A second after, the darkness in front of him started to move like a mini tornado that sucked everything in that room, including Neo’s body. But however, whatever holding Neo’s body was much stronger than the mini-sucking tornado. Neo was still there while he could feel the strong sucking sensation moving to the mini tornado's center. Wondering what was going on, he could only be taught to himself to stand still and calm down. But the movement of the mini tornado was powerful, thus, Neo started to lose consciousness. “Am I really going to die now?” he said to himself. And suddenly … Neo’s body started to feel hot as it burned from the inside. He tried to scream but could not do that because of something still shutting his mouth up. The burning sensation was still there, while a painful feeling started to join the party. Neo could ha
Darkness. Neo could not see anything except the darkness that surrounded him. He was sure that both of his eyes were fully opened, but there was still nothing there. Only darkness. Started to wonder what was happening to him, he suddenly felt like his body was flying. He was lying, but he could not feel anything holding him back, as if he was there lying while flying.“Is this what they called dreaming?” he whispered to himself. His voice sounded weird, as if he got a sore throat.“Hello? Is anybody here?”Neo was trying to find the answer himself. The notification was the only thing he could remember before everything turned into darkness. When the countdown reached 0 seconds, suddenly, everything turned black.“Hell─.”A transparent screen suddenly appeared in front of his face. The light from the screen blinded Neo’s eyes for a second.[Rebooting in progress (10 minutes left)]A weird loading scale inside the screen started to count down the time. Neo tried to touch the screen, but